Not mirage

Thirst for achievement increased
Resulting in speed of finding the right track .
Failed bunch of times
And then stepped back .
Consoled, “You are in desert and the thirst is just leading you to a mirage..
There’s nothing which is giving at least half of the efforts back”

Ignoring the thirst, was leaving the desert..
A strong wind blew
After that all I knew,
It wasn’t a desert, just my eyes were caged with sand.

Closed the eyes and opened back.
Saw, there’s no mirage..
Just the lake of my achievement is far
But I’m still on the right track.

27 Comments

  1. vaniheart says:

    Wow 👏😮 very well expressed

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    1. ahiricreates says:

      Thank you so much Vaniii❤️🤗❤️

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    2. Bishal Debnath says:

      Something changed …but don’t know what

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      1. ahiricreates says:

        And you’re successful to make me think again bishal 😶

        Like

  2. Silent fury says:

    Amazing!! I loved it…🧡

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    1. ahiricreates says:

      Thank you so much ❤️

      Glad you liked it 🤗

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  3. Praveen T.S. says:

    (just my eyes were caged with sand) 👏True, and relatable to me as I said in my “Inner Faults” – Its the legs that are dirt and not the immaculate house that illusions the house is dirty.

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    1. ahiricreates says:

      Very very true!! 😌
      Yes I read inner faults and I genuinely loved that!

      Glad u liked my writing! Thanks for your valuable comment 🤗means a lot

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  4. Amen to that!! Yes indeed ❤😊

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    1. ahiricreates says:

      Amen😌

      Thank you so much for reading and dropping your kind comment ❤️🙏

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  5. Jeff Flesch says:

    Lovely. 🤗❤️

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    1. ahiricreates says:

      Oh thank you so much Jeff❤️🤗

      Liked by 1 person

      1. Jeff Flesch says:

        You’re most welcome, my dear friend. Always. ❤🤗

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  6. Lokesh Sastya says:

    Not Mirage is a powerful poem. It makes me strong. 👊

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    1. ahiricreates says:

      Oh thank you so much Lokesh!! Means a lot coming from youu seriously ❤️

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  7. Loved reading this!

    Liked by 1 person

    1. ahiricreates says:

      Thank you so much for reading ❤️
      Glad you liked it! ✨

      Like

      1. Welcome so much! 🙂 It was super good!

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      2. ahiricreates says:

        ❤️means a lot!

        Stay happy ✨

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  8. Joanne A says:

    You expressed something I’ve felt so often, something we often feel. Amazing!

    Liked by 1 person

    1. ahiricreates says:

      Means a lot that you could relate some feeling of yours with my writing ❤️
      Thank you Soo much for reading and for leaving this kind valuable comment 🤗

      Liked by 1 person

      1. Joanne A says:

        😊😊

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  9. Ashish kumar says:

    Excellent poem… The setbacks leading to success well expressed in this poem…

    Liked by 1 person

    1. ahiricreates says:

      Thank you so much sir!! 🙏 Humbled!

      P.S, so sorry for being late to reply! Was busy with some exams 😪

      Liked by 1 person

      1. Ashish kumar says:

        No worries…. Hope your exams went well…

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  10. Olivia Ava says:

    Beautiful writing with an amazing picture❤️

    Liked by 1 person

    1. ahiricreates says:

      Thank you So much ❤️❤️

      Like

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